Saturday, April 10, 2010

Revision

She sat for over an hour in her car

with a pencil

scribbling and re-scribbling

until she found a way out of her confusion


while I walked the beach

angry, disgusted at the density of others

chilled by the sea breeze

my mind in turmoil

yet—unbidden—it rewrites the poem.

Peter Goodwin

2 comments:

  1. I haven't got a topic for a poem today
    though I've tried to think of something off and on
    Like this: the dog is snoring
    in a way that's close to roaring
    in G minor—no, that's boring
    So I'm giving up.

    Maggie Creshkoff

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  2. Finally getting around to posting my attempts while in NYC.

    Poem for 4/10/10


    Dogs of NYC

    The park teemed with joggers,
    Skaters, bicyclists,
    and dogs.
    Brown, black, white
    No yellow.
    Pure breds and designer mutts,
    Mullatos and hounds only
    Their owners could love

    White-haired retirees
    walking dogs
    Men and women
    No teens or children.
    Sometimes a stroller
    With an infant inside
    Dog attached.
    But still, mom pushing
    Controlling the urban wagon train.

    All leashed
    Except one bearded Scottie.
    His owner, checked grungy fedora
    Looming over his frown
    Waited as the dog finished in the grass
    And then trotted by his people
    To the next clump of yellow daffodils.

    Silent except one barking at another
    Ignoring Dan and I
    As we walk past in the Park.
    Debbie, the grocery cat
    Was friendly.
    Purring and rubbing up against my leg
    Meowing a question at my hand
    Pet me again?

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